高分悬赏帮我看看这篇英文稿子~很急，后天演讲比赛要用

Question

There is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people.
To make her full of peace and laughter,
To let her has sweet songs everywhere.
To let her holds ponds of green water,
To let her sails under a sky with clouds found nowhere.
You are in this dream,
They are in this dream,
And I am also in this dream.
Different languages saying the two words,
Green Olympics.
Yeah, I can remember clearly, July 13th of 2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can forget. When I holding my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze, with no one could breathe. My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television. As Mr.Samaranc said the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition.
Fuwa will serve as the Official Mascots of Beijing 2008 Olympic Games, carrying a message of friendship and peace--and blessings from China--to children all over the world. Beibei is the Fish, Jingjing is the Panda, Huanhuan is the Olympic Flame, Yingying is the Tibetan Antelope and Nini is the Swallow. When you put their names together--Bei Jing Huan Ying Ni--they say "Welcome to Beijing," offering a warm invitation that reflects the mission of Fuwa as young ambassadors for the Olympic Games.
Now that 2008 is coming, athletics coming from countries all around the world are going to come to China. We’re going to make the dream come true. making a better place of Green Olympics and sustainable development is just like stare in the face.
We should be awake, ‘Cause we are the volunteers in the future

Answer 1

错误在原句上批注，修改在（）内：

（Do you know）there is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people?(用问句的形式开头，可以吸引听众的注意)

(It's a dream)to make her full of peace and laughter！

(A dream)to let her has （应为have，因为let sb do sth.do是动词不定式，省略了to，要用原形。）sweet songs everywhere.！

(A dream)to let her holds （hold） ponds of green water, （！）

(A dream)to let her sails （sail） under a （blue）sky with clouds found nowhere.

You （You改为We）are in this dream, ！
They （They改为You）are in this dream,！
And I am （I am改为The whole world is）also in this dream.！

Different languages saying the two words（saying the two words改为will say two same words）,

Green Olympics.(好像是Great吧，口号好像是“Great Beijing ,Great Olympics”,意思是新北京，新奥运，我应该没记错)

Yeah, I can remember clearly, （on）July 13th of （改为in）2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can （把no去掉，在can后面加never）forget.

When I holding （改为held 过去式）my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze（应为frozen，adj.冻结的, 冷冰的, 冷酷的，vbl.freeze的过去分词）, with no one could breathe(could breathe改为breathing，with后面用ing座伴随状语).

My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television.

As（when） Mr.Samaranc said (改为called out比较有号召力)the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition（for so long a time!突出兴奋时间很长）.
There is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people.
To make her full of peace and laughter,
To let her has sweet songs everywhere.
To let her holds ponds of green water,
To let her sails under a sky with clouds found nowhere.
You are in this dream,
They are in this dream,
And I am also in this dream.
Different languages saying the two words,
Green Olympics.
Yeah, I can remember clearly, July 13th of 2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can forget. When I holding my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze, with no one could breathe. My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television. As Mr.Samaranc said the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition.
Fuwa will serve as the Official Mascots of Beijing 2008 Olympic Games, carrying a message of friendship and peace--and blessings from China--to children all over the world. Beibei is the Fish, Jingjing is the Panda, Huanhuan is the Olympic Flame, Yingying is the Tibetan Antelope and Nini is the Swallow. When you put their names together--Bei Jing Huan Ying Ni--they say "Welcome to Beijing," offering a warm invitation that reflects the mission of Fuwa as young ambassadors for the Olympic Games.
Now that 2008 is coming, athletics coming from countries all around the world are going to come to China. We’re going to make the dream come true. making a better place of Green Olympics and sustainable development is just like stare in the face.
We should be awake, ‘Cause we are the volunteers in the future
那里有个梦想， 所有地球人的梦想。
让这个星球充满了和平与欢笑。
让她到处是欢快的歌声。（这里她代表地球）
让她到处是清绿的水。
让她荡漾在碧空万里的天空下。
你在这个梦想中
他们在这个梦想中
我同样也在这个梦想中
不同的语言表达着两个字
绿色的奥领匹克
对的， 我清楚的记得， 2001年7月13日， 那个美丽的夜晚，没有一个中国人能忘记。
当时我牵着我妈妈的手，空气几乎凝固， 没人能够呼吸， 我和我的家人眼睛都盯着电视。 当撒马兰起先生念到“北京”的时候， 整个中国沸腾了。

参考资料：抄的

Answer 2

（Do you know）there is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people?(用问句的形式开头，可以吸引听众的注意)

(It's a dream)to make her full of peace and laughter！

(A dream)to let her has （应为have，因为let sb do sth.do是动词不定式，省略了to，要用原形。）sweet songs everywhere.！

(A dream)to let her holds （hold） ponds of green water, （！）

(A dream)to let her sails （sail） under a （blue）sky with clouds found nowhere.

You （You改为We）are in this dream, ！
They （They改为You）are in this dream,！
And I am （I am改为The whole world is）also in this dream.！

Different languages saying the two words（saying the two words改为will say two same words）,

Green Olympics.(好像是Great吧，口号好像是“Great Beijing ,Great Olympics”,意思是新北京，新奥运，我应该没记错)

Yeah, I can remember clearly, （on）July 13th of （改为in）2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can （把no去掉，在can后面加never）forget.

When I holding （改为held 过去式）my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze（应为frozen，adj.冻结的, 冷冰的, 冷酷的，vbl.freeze的过去分词）, with no one could breathe(could breathe改为breathing，with后面用ing座伴随状语).

My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television.

As（when） Mr.Samaranc said (改为called out比较有号召力)the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition（for so long a time!突出兴奋时间很长）.
There is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people.
To make her full of peace and laughter,
To let her has sweet songs everywhere.
To let her holds ponds of green water,
To let her sails under a sky with clouds found nowhere.
You are in this dream,
They are in this dream,
And I am also in this dream.
Different languages saying the two words,
Green Olympics.
Yeah, I can remember clearly, July 13th of 2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can forget. When I holding my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze, with no one could breathe. My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television. As Mr.Samaranc said the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition.
Fuwa will serve as the Official Mascots of Beijing 2008 Olympic Games, carrying a message of friendship and peace--and blessings from China--to children all over the world. Beibei is the Fish, Jingjing is the Panda, Huanhuan is the Olympic Flame, Yingying is the Tibetan Antelope and Nini is the Swallow. When you put their names together--Bei Jing Huan Ying Ni--they say "Welcome to Beijing," offering a warm invitation that reflects the mission of Fuwa as young ambassadors for the Olympic Games.
Now that 2008 is coming, athletics coming from countries all around the world are going to come to China. We’re going to make the dream come true. making a better place of Green Olympics and sustainable development is just like stare in the face.
We should be awake, ‘Cause we are the volunteers in the future
那里有个梦想， 所有地球人的梦想。
让这个星球充满了和平与欢笑。
让她到处是欢快的歌声。（这里她代表地球）
让她到处是清绿的水。
让她荡漾在碧空万里的天空下。
你在这个梦想中
他们在这个梦想中
我同样也在这个梦想中
不同的语言表达着两个字
绿色的奥领匹克
对的， 我清楚的记得， 2001年7月13日， 那个美丽的夜晚，没有一个中国人能忘记。
当时我牵着我妈妈的手，空气几乎凝固， 没人能够呼吸， 我和我的家人眼睛都盯着电视。 当撒马兰起先生念到“北京”的时候， 整个中国沸腾了。

Answer 3

楼上的一个人morning1225答的好

Answer 4

好厉害阿
我好佩服你能写这么长啊

Answer 5

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