请为下面这段话改错，并说明错在哪儿了（详细）

Question

麻烦改一下。。。谢啦。。。

I want a day or computer.Because now,peopel always use computer,it's very general.Computer give pelple lots of fun.We canlisten musics,watch movies,draw pictuers ,write Emails,get lots of informations and do many many things on the computer or Internet.How convenience!But now,hacker always makes program broken,and then we can't use computer,we can't do lots of things!So I want a day of computer,to keep a lookout hacker and make our life more informationzation!

本人英语不好，再次谢谢啦。。。

Answer 1

第一句话不明白你想表达什么意思,I want a day or computer.我想要一天或者一个电脑?如果你是要表达这个意思,可数名词computer前面要加a.I want a day or a computer.这句话的意义很费解...

第二句,always在这里意义不太恰当,always含有有永远的意思,这里就用often吧.你表示的应该是,人们经常使用电脑吧?外国人喜欢把时间状语放句子的后面,所以把now放最后会比较好,而且用nowadays会好一点,now也没有错.

第三句,要么是 The computer,要么是 Computers.

第四句,
第一点:你的主要部分是用电脑和网络可以做很多的事,在英文中.强调的部分总是要把它提前.
第二点:music是不可数名词,没有s.还有一些词语表达不够精确,这些词没有错,只是不够精确,不是那么那么的好.listen是不及物动词,后面要加to跟宾语.
这个句子在尽量模仿你的情况下,改成这样:
We can use computer and internet to do many kinds of things such as listenning to music, watching movies, making pictuers ,sending Emails and getting lots of informations.

第五句,How convenient!用形容词,不是名词.

第六句,hacker是可数名字,所以用The hacker或者 Hackers.然后后面是一个很奇怪的用法.我看得懂你要表达的意思,但是外国人可能就看不懂了.
这个句子在尽量模仿你的情况下,改成这样:
Hackers often spread many kinds of virus to attack our computers, then it makes our computer doesn't works right.

第七句...我直接给你改了吧.我不知道怎么形容了.
to keep our computers away of hacking attacks, and gives our daily life more information.

看完了我明白你第一句打错了.你是想要一个电脑日?
可以说,a day of the abc's of computer.电脑的基础知识.

Answer 2

I want ．．．．because nowadays computers have been part of our life. Computer adds much color to our life. For example, we can listen musics, watch movies, draw pictures, send emails, get lots of informations and so on. While, nowadays, hackers always break computer programs,thus we can't use it and do many things.So i want(我不太明白你到底需要什么,你翻译的这个day of computer看不懂)．．后面你请教别人吧，当中我帮你该了点语法和优化了写作，参考下咯本回答被提问者采纳

Answer 3

I want a day with computer.Because nowadays,it's very common for people to use computer.Computer gives people lots of fun.We can listen to music,watch movies,draw pictuers, send Emails and so on by computer and Internet.How convenient it is!But now,hacker always makes trouble,and then computer doesn't work,which waste us a lot of time and energy! So I want a day with computer which I can spend to deal with the hacker and virus and bring people a more convinient life!