英文自我介绍，请大家帮我修改

Question

我英语本来就恶心，不过还是勉强写了一小段自我介绍，想要用在简历中，请大家帮我挑挑其中的错误，我知道有很多的，不胜感激~~~
As you see,I'm here try to introduce me in my poor English.I am 23 year old,be brought up in a well-educated family.I have good image and breeding.
Having a very humorous way of talking,honestly,enthusiasm and the sense of responsibility is strong,can be very good cooperates with other people.

Answer 1

简历里面书写的话不能用这么轻松调侃的语气写的，我开始以为是你要站在台上说的，这么随意和口语化。
简历里面一般都属规规矩矩介绍自己的。面试时候你可以这样介绍自己，但是书面的简历最好还是formal些比较好的。
你可以这样写：
Self-intrduction

Brought up in a well-educated family, I'm cultivated into a young man with amiable character and sense of humor. Honesty, enthusiasm, team spirit and sense of responsibility are all reflected in my disposition. I'm also proficient in negotiating and cooperating with other people.

PS:简历里貌似没有自我介绍这项，都是教育培训工作经验获奖证书等等之类的，我觉得你最好多写些实的，多突出自己的专业技能和特长，这样把握才更大。自我介绍最好充分准备面试时候用！GOOD LUCK GUY!

Answer 2

没必要说as you see,因为人家已经看到了，也不要说自己poor english，老外他们都知道的，但是如果你自己还说自己poor，他们会觉得可能你真的英语非常差。

另外年龄也没必要写，因为在简历里面应该有年龄这栏

我不太明白你说i have a good image 什么意思，是想说自己形象气质佳吗？我感觉这样不太好，可能会给人留下浮夸的印象，而且image并不重要的

剩下的都不错，但是没必要非常直白地说自己很幽默

总的说就是夸自己的部分语气有点强硬和过于肯定

建议在网上找点范文，或者看看别人写的personal statement,

虽然侧重点不一样，但都是夸自己的，呵呵

加油

Answer 3

Hello everyone. Let me give a introduction about myself. I am 23 year old,and was brought up in a well-educated family, so I have a happy childhood. I am very hunmorous, honesty and responsible, and can get along very well with others.

Answer 4

I'm here introducing myself with my small knowledge of English.
I had been brought up in a well-educated family. I always look my best on the appearence while I'm working. The humor I have is always well used in conversations. I'm enthusiastic on the work and always take my responsibility seriously. I believe I can be very good on cooperating with others.