第1个回答 2011-06-20
楼主,这个东西我写过。
很恶心,很磨人的事对吧,我记得当时我用了两个星期才写完。
入学申请一定要吸引人,要写出自己对该校该专业的优势和热忱,也要顺便介绍自己,表现自己的个性。
我拜读了您的中文版本,觉得缺少实际的东西,国外的人最讨厌套话,所以最好用自己光纤的一面打动人。
比如,你说“我一直对经济学有着极大的兴趣。”举个例子啊,比如你在学校里咋表现的,或者组织别的同学学习经济学什么的。老外喜欢有组织能力,有干劲的孩子,还有他们喜欢读实例!!
实例有多重要呢? 老外觉得如果你有兴趣你就要证明,没有就说明你在说假话。 咱 伤不起啊!
所以我建议,你在多加入些自己的实例充实一下,中文也可以,大家一起帮你完成,这样不是更好么。
当然也可以参考别人写的,写的例子很多的,你找不到的话问我要。
第2个回答 2011-06-20
dear***:
I write your application to be a member of the, I will be very grateful to you for reading my letter of recommendation.
I graduated from XXX, from urinate on foreign life has a great yearning. In the DuoNian study life, I have always had a great interest in economics. This affect my life direction, I have a dream, is for the XXX
University school of economics, and then went to Wall Street for further study.
In the first time the chance, I learned the your school. Amongst Its chance for me is a big a challenge, this to my life has a great significance. I believe XXX is a special school. Rich teaching force, and beautiful campus environment and enjoys the reputation of Chinese appealing.
So I hope I can through the your school this platform give full play to the potential of the self, improve ourselves, create a self value, achieve their goals in life. I believe that the value of life is to create brilliant, I don't want, commonplaces life.
If I could, I will cherish can enter your school learning opportunities. Once again thank you for taking time to read my letter of recommendation.
*****
2011-6-20
自己再修改一下 可以的话 采纳下啊